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[Entry #09]First draft feedback...

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Updated: Dec 17, 2020

I have now had my supervisor meeting and have received my feedback for my first draft.


Overall my supervisor said that my first draft has taken good shape. She says that Fatema was very lively and that she speaks very well for radio.


Onto the critiques, my supervisor told me to improve these things:

-to change parts of my script, to make some parts longer (to narrate more), to remove some of the statistics because too many numbers are inappropriate for radio.

-To make some transitions longer

-To shorten the gaps between each clip

-to make some of the sounds I recorded (clock ticking, students talking in classroom) longer so they are more effective in the piece.


Moreover, I mainly have to work on my script, I need to re-write a lot of my narrative links.


Therefore, my next steps are to make all the changes needed and to start writing my reflection and to continue uploading on my social media account.

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